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I think that I am drowning now,
but I guess it is ok.
I feel I'm going wrong somehow,
but I guess I'll find my way.

I guess I'm wandering dark paths now,
without stars giving me light,
but someday there'll be another show,
where I can win the fight.

It seems, that I am falling now,
but I guess I'll rise someday,
Seems all things are crumbling now,
but someday I'll be ok.

I know the rain will stop,
I know that I'll rise up,
Someday....
Someday.....
:iconlynan:
Someting new. Started this about a month ago, but till know I had no idea of how to finish this. Well...yesterday I had.
Anyways, as most times the words kinda came to me while listening to music.
Hope you like it :)
Any suggestions for improvement are appreciated.

Lynan
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:iconchihaky:
This is so nice and I think it's also motivating and i dont even find words in our native language ;u;
But I noticed, in the second strophe you wrote I'm, in the first and third I am. Is it ment to be like that?
ANYWAY, thank you for sharing it, it's beautiful ♥
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:iconlynan:
~Lynan Sep 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Danke :hug: Freut mich das du es magst.
Und das mit I am/I'm ist mehr oder weniger Absicht. Ich versuch mir immer zu überlegen wie es rythmisch passen würde und ich hatte da jeweils das Gefühl, dass es so besser passen würde.
:)
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:iconchihaky:
Bitte :huggle:
okay, versteh ich C:
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:iconsosouritssweet:
i ment keep writing girl
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:iconsosouritssweet:
thats beautiful ............vary lyrical i wish i wrote it .......with ur permeation could i use it to sing not to sell or anything i just think it would be a pretty song if not that cool keep writhing girl :)
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:iconlynan:
~Lynan Sep 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I'm a boy, but anyways, thanks a lot :)
And if you want to, you sure can. I'm actually happy that the text makes you want to. :D
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:iconsosouritssweet:
omg sorry tehe ur awesome thanx dude
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:iconlynan:
~Lynan Oct 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
no problem, thanks and you're welcome^^
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